[projectaon] Re: California Countdown // Replacement Fan Art
- From: Thomas Wolmer <angantyr@xxxxxxxxx>
- To: projectaon@xxxxxxxxxxxxx
- Date: Fri, 2 Sep 2005 23:49:29 +0200
2005/8/31, Simon Osborne <outspaced@xxxxxxxxxxxx>:
> Thomas Wolmer wrote:
> > The "Contributors for Project Aon Editions" and
> > "This project would have been impossible without the artistic
> > contributions of:" lines look a bit out of place here.
>
> Really? I don't honestly see any problem with them. Could you be a bit more
> specific, please?
What I mean is that there is a shift from the talk about our
replacement illustrations and illustrators in the introduction, to a
project wide scope and very formal headings - with almost the same
information below. Hm yes, it's not just the headings I feel are out
of place, it's the whole section. If the few items of added info is
moved elsewhere, it could even go away completely. Alternatively,
maybe the introduction text could contain less of the info that's
repeated.
In fact, you are now yourself credited below a heading for artistic
contributions. Maybe the section heading could just be 'Credits' and
the note about the artistic contributions being invaluable could be
part of the introduction?
(Yes, I took part in an formal inspection of a product description
document at work today. Does it show?)
It would't be a message from me if it didn't end with "A few more...":
The description of Chris's contribution is neatly left adjusted after
the dash, while J.C.'s and Michael's are not.
The pages with Chris's illustrations should have his name as
'Christopher'. just like the front page.
The page numbers in the copyright section are wrong, at least for
Chris (it's now 3 pages).
Since there are "real" page numbers (even though they are not
printed), whu not include a Table of Contents?
--
Thomas
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