On Fri, Aug 31, 2012 at 6:44 AM, Simon Osborne <outspaced@xxxxxxxxxxxx> wrote: > On 30/08/2012 23:07, Jonathan Blake wrote: >> >> On Wed, Aug 29, 2012 at 3:04 AM, Simon Osborne <outspaced@xxxxxxxxxxxx> >> wrote: >>> >>> >>> Speaking about commas: >>> >>> <http://projectaon.proboards.com/index.cgi?action=gotopost&board=helpwanted&thread=706&post=38777> >>> >>> (er) 02fotw 49: >>> Sails tear, ropes mysteriously untie themselves and timbers warp and >>> leak. >>> The men become short-tempered in the cramped quarters and fighting, often >>> to >>> the death, is commonplace. >>> >>> >>> The first sentence should have a serial comma before 'and'. [tw] writes: >>> "I >>> would have written "their cramped quarters". A comma before "and >>> fighting" >>> might also improve readability." I'm not sure about changing 'the' to >>> 'their' (the original seems correct to me), but should there be a comma >>> before 'and fighting' in view of last week's discussion? >> >> "The men become short-tempered in the cramped quarters, and fighting — >> often to the death — is commonplace." > > I'd also vote for the first option with the dashes. It's less fussy. Fixed. -- Jon ~~~~~~ Manage your subscription at http://www.freelists.org/list/projectaon