On 8/21/05, Thomas Wolmer <angantyr@xxxxxxxxx> wrote: > Alright, I have now updated the XML files (being checked in as this is > sent) with the non-contested footnotes and small illustration changes. > [snip footnotes] Those look good although I would change the phrase ", even though your WILLPOWER score may be negative even before the subtraction" to ". This may leave you with a negative WILLPOWER score, or if it was already negative, it may make your score become even more negative". > Then there's the tricky Section 37 of 02tfc. Note that unlike the > two other paths from the previous "circular cave", here you are told > you are climbing upwards, so from a geographical point of view you > may be somewhere up in a mountain above the Desolation Valley. > And finally, there's the option to add something like "Through a crack > in the northern cave wall you catch a glimpse of a desolate plain far > below." This would also require a paragraph break before "You find the > skeletal remains of several bodies ...". I'm still leaning more toward this option. Perhaps this works: "You walk along the west passage. It rises steadily and eventually opens into a small cave with an opening that overlooks a large gorge. Beneath the light of the full moon you see miles and miles of contorted rock. It looks as if it has been melted in a furnace. "You find the skeletal remains of several bodies but as you lift a skull to examine it, it crumbles to dust in your hand." > Finally, there's small1 of 02tfc. I'm now leaning more towards the > Mind Gem (174/292, 266, 282, 305) than a bold from your Staff, but if > it's really the Staff I want to remove it from Section 132. I doesn't say "Mind Gem" to me, personally, and I'd be a bit confused about it if I found it in one of the mind gem sections. I see your point about removing it from 132. -- Jon