[projectaon] Re: 17tdoi Erratum Report
- From: James Durrant <james.durrant@xxxxxxxxxxxxx>
- To: "projectaon@xxxxxxxxxxxxx" <projectaon@xxxxxxxxxxxxx>
- Date: Thu, 13 Sep 2012 15:23:22 +0100
I think it's important to have the full context:
http://www.projectaon.org/en/xhtml/lw/17tdoi/sect290.htm Your final blow draws
a hellish shriek from the skull of Deathlord Ixiataaga,
so loud that it batters the walls and shakes the plinth on which you stand. The
Deathstaff disintegrates in his skeletal hand and he topples backwards towards
the fiery moat. Yet as he does so, his body crumbles into a plume of grey-green
dust which is sucked away into the whirling maw of the Shadow Gate, together
with the shattering remnants of the Deathstaff. From the summary below, I
would have agreed with the change - but reading the context above, it looks
like it could easily still be breaking apart. I'm not sure the change would
improve the overall flavour of the text? James.
> Date: Thu, 13 Sep 2012 15:00:49 +0100
> From: outspaced@xxxxxxxxxxxx
> To: projectaon@xxxxxxxxxxxxx
> Subject: [projectaon] 17tdoi Erratum Report
>
> Hi
>
> Sellic reported the following on the forum:
> <http://projectaon.proboards.com/index.cgi?action=gotopost&board=helpwanted&thread=706&post=38807>
>
> Book 17, section 290
>
> Quote:
> The Deathstaff disintegrates in his skeletal hand ... together with the
> shattering remnants of the Deathstaff.
>
> [shattered would better fit in the description. The remnants of
> disintegration are not going to shatter anything anymore.]
>
> --
> Simon Osborne
> Project Aon
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