[projectaon] Editor's Companion Submission
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From: Keith Sheldon <Relenoir@xxxxxxxx>
Date: 00:39:38 on Wednesday, January 26, 2005
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(ne) 16tlov 350: consumed ... everything, -> consumed . . . everything, [KS:
Appears the ellipses are not spaced correctly, but I may be wrong.]
(er) 16tlov 350: collapsing shadow gate -> collapsing Shadow Gate
(er) 16tlov 350: the shadow gate and -> the Shadow Gate and
(er) 16tlov 348: skills of invisibility -> skills of Invisibility
(er) 16tlov 345: the shadow gate and -> the Shadow Gate and
(er) 16tlov 345: forwards on to -> forwards onto
(er) 16tlov 344: skim the tree-tops -> skim the treetops
(er) 16tlov 343: your sixth sense -> your Sixth Sense [KS: Yes, no, maybe. . .
I don't know.]
(er) 16tlov 342: insignia identify him -> insignia identifies him
(er) 16tlov 342: trees so you -> trees, so you
(er) 16tlov 341: towards the north-east. -> towards the northeast. [KS: Just
suggesting. . .]
(er) 16tlov 341: a north-easterly route -> a northeasterly route [KS: Again,
not sure on this one.]
(er) 16tlov 339: first-floor ruins -> first floor ruins
(er) 16tlov 338: your sixth sense warns -> your Sixth Sense warns [KS: Yes, no,
maybe?]
(er) 16tlov 337: Magnakai pathsmanship skills -> Magnakai Pathsmanship skills
(er) 16tlov 327: circle of stalagtites -> circle of stalactites [KS:
Stalactites hang from a ceiling or wall, stalagmites rise from a floor. No
such thing as stalagtites.]
(er) 16tlov 326: Grand Guardian, or higher, -> Grand Guardian or higher,
(er) 16tlov 325: safety of the ruins, by turning -> safety of the ruins by
turning
(er) 16tlov 319: rank of Kai Grand Mastership, -> rank of Kai mastery, [KS: I
can't think of anywhere else that a choice was phrased that way, does this seem
odd to anyone else? Everything else I saw was Kai mastery.]
(er) 16tlov 319: Huntmastery and have reached the Kai rank of Grand Guardian,
or higher, -> Huntmastery, and have reached the Kai rank of Grand Guardian or
higher,
(er) 16tlov 319: without trace. -> without a trace. [KS: Never heard it that
way before. Could be me. . .]
(er) 16tlov 318: the shadow gate. -> the Shadow Gate.
(er) 16tlov 315: the king's death -> the King's death [KS: Important office
title capitalized here?]
(er) 16tlov 314: Elder is wide-eyed -> Elder is wide eyed [KS: Not sure if the
hyphen rule applies to this one or not.]
(er) 16tlov 311: energy comes arching -> energy comes arcing [KS: Never seen
"arching" energy or electricity, it's always "arcing". Just my thoughts. . .
;)]
(er) 16tlov 307: north-easterly direction -> northeasterly direction [KS: I
could be wrong about this one, but thought I'd at least mention it.]
(er) 16tlov 307: Magnakai pathsmanship skills -> Magnakai Pathsmanship skills
(ne) 16tlov 304: a loud Thok! [KS: In the text, the word Thok! (is that a
word?;)) is italicized.]
(er) 16tlov 302: Kai pathsmanship Discipline -> Kai Pathsmanship Discipline
[KS: -or- Magnakai Pathsmanship Discipline]
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