[projectaon] proofreading book 17
- From: "McSwain LeRoy" <simonaamanarfan@xxxxxxxxxxx>
- To: projectaon@xxxxxxxxxxxxx
- Date: Sat, 10 Mar 2007 00:07:30 -0500
hello everyone. i have another list for you (from book 17). i guess i
shall proceed to the grey star books next. for sommerlund & the kai. --
leroy
(tssf para18) Drakkarim settlements => ? Drakkar settlements
(equipment) This contains six Arrows, record them on your Weapons List. =>
This contains six Arrows; record them on your Weapons List.
(improved sun lord telegnosis) Time duration and degree of surface
difficulty increases => Time duration and degree of surface difficulty
increase
1 Lord Rimoah, then you => Lord Rimoah; then you
7 undead Drakkarim warriors => ? undead Drakkar warriors
14 a horde of undead warriors leap => ? a horde of undead warriors
leaps
20 the ceiling there is => the ceiling--there is
22 King's greeting, then you => King's greeting; then you
31 the Drakkarim undead => ? the Drakkar undead
31 Undead Drakkarim Search Party => Undead Drakkar Search Party
34 undead Drakkarim guards => ? undead Drakkar guards
46 the keyhole, then you => the keyhole; then you
50 A troop of a dozen undead warriors appear => A troop of a dozen
undead warriors appears
54 suddenly hesitate your Kai => suddenly hesitate; your Kai
56 a million tons of ice, snow, and shale comes rumbling => a million
tons of ice, snow, and shale come rumbling
60 a trio of crackling bolts come => a trio of crackling bolts comes
63 the Drakkarim guards => the Drakkar guards
64 The trio of ghastly creatures press => The trio of ghastly creatures
presses
68 thrashes wildly, then, amidst => thrashes wildly; then, amidst
69 to be Drakkarim in design. => to be Drakkar in design.
86 above it, then you => above it; then you
92 its feet, then it => its feet; then it
96 short-lived they quickly => short-lived; they quickly
114 the horde falter => ? the horde falters
135 the tip; the prelude => the tip, the prelude
140 Drakkarim settlements => ? Drakkar settlements
145 their misshapen form => their misshapen forms
152 The Drakkarim patrol => The Drakkar patrol
153 undead Drakkarim warriors => ? undead Drakkar warriors
153 the Drakkarim undead => ? the Drakkar undead
153 of Drakkarim undead => ? of Drakkar undead (two instances)
156 An undead Drakkarim soldier => An undead Drakkar soldier
176 undead Drakkarim warriors => ? undead Drakkar warriors
176 the Drakkarim guards => ? the Drakkar guards
186 undead Drakkarim warriors => ? undead Drakkar warriors
186 the Drakkarim undead => the Drakkar undead
189 your directions, then you => your directions; then you
196 Drakkarim guards => ? Drakkar guards
196 a row of pillars topple => a row of pillars topples
206 a million tons of ice, snow, and shale comes rumbling => a million
tons of ice, snow, and shale come rumbling
207 An undead Drakkarim soldier => An undead Drakkar soldier
207 busy cavern; by an => busy cavern: by an
209 A score of undead have => A score of undead has
212 icy chill, then you => icy chill; then you
217 static electricity, then you => static electricity; then you
222 undead Drakkarim warriors => ? undead Drakkar warriors
222 the Drakkarim guards => the Drakkar guards
236 Drakkarim warriors => ? Drakkar warriors
236 Drakkarim undead => ? Drakkar undead
243 Drakkarim Undead => ? Drakkar Undead
243 Without weapons or equipment you have no choice but to fight this
enemy unarmed. (Remember to make the appropriate adjustments to your COMBAT
SKILL.) => (what are the 'appropriate adjustments'? the combat skill loss
for unarmed fighting has been eliminated)
248 my Lord => my lord (it is lower case in the other two instances from
this ref.248)
250 each one frozen in the action they were => each one frozen in the
action it was
258 undead Drakkarim warriors => ? undead Drakkar warriors
258 the Drakkarim guards => ? the Drakkar guards
260 first line of screeching Drakkarim hurl themselves => first line of
screeching Drakkarim hurls itself
260 Drakkarim bodies => ? Drakkar bodies
262 undead Drakkarim warriors => ? undead Drakkar warriors
262 the Drakkarim guards => ? the Drakkar guards
266 undead Drakkarim warriors => ? undead Drakkar warriors
272 you own pace => your own pace
279 the Drakkarim undead => ? the Drakkar undead
279 Undead Drakkarim Search Party => Undead Drakkar Search Party
284 the helmsman at the bow of the ship => the helmsman at the stern of
the ship (cf. ref.271 etc.)
287 six round => six rounds
298 Drakkarim undead => ? Drakkar undead (two instances)
301 The second wave of Lavas come => The second wave of Lavas comes
306 undead Drakkarim warriors => ? undead Drakkar warriors
306 the Drakkarim guards => ? the Drakkar guards
307 the door, then you => the door; then you
336 Without weapons or equipment you have no choice but to fight these
foes bare-handed. (Remember to make the appropriate adjustments to your
COMBAT SKILL.) => (what are the 'appropriate adjustments'? the combat
skill loss for unarmed fighting has been eliminated)
343 The Drakkarim patrol => The Drakkar patrol
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