[projectaon] 22tbos issues list
- From: McSwain LeRoy <simonaamanarfan@xxxxxxxxxxx>
- To: <projectaon@xxxxxxxxxxxxx>
- Date: Thu, 28 May 2009 22:29:01 -0400
fellow kai lords,
i loved 'the buccaneers of shadaki'. another masterwork by joe dever. thanks
for bringing it back to the public. the list follows. i look forward to the
discussion and perhaps learning a little about my 'native' language in the
process.
for sommerlund and the kaileroy
(tssf) which day dormant => which lay dormant(tssf) King's army of
Sommerlund => ??? King's Army of Sommerlund(disc) have undertaken then
your => have undertaken, then your(equi) four Disciplines then you =>? four
Disciplines, then you(equi) The currency most readily accepted in southeastern
Magnamund is the Gold Crown. => (It's the Noble isn't it? Do we need to say
that Gold Crowns are accepted usually at the rate of one Gold Crown per
Noble?)(imp) As you rise through the higher levels of Kai Grand Mastery you
will find that your Disciplines will steadily improve. => (This sentence is
printed twice)(imp) The nature of additional improvements and how they affect
your existing Grand Master Disciplines will be noted in the Improved Grand
Master Disciplines section of future Lone Wolf New Order books. => (This
sentence is printed twice)3 barge => ? barge into (According to
dictionary.com, 'to barge' in this meaning is only intransitive.)6 He says
that => ? Melchar says that (im
proves clarity)8 1 Gold Crown) => 1 Gold Crown.)10 the base of the
spiral => the base of a spiral (You have not yet seen the stairs on this
path)12 the boat, and the tip => the boat, the tip12 crew of The
Triasus are => ? crew of The Triasus is12 Sesketera's crew begin => ?
Sesketera's crew begins21 erase 10 Gold Crowns from your current total. => ?
subtact 10 Gold Crowns from your current total.22 Thanks … for => Thanks . .
. for (PAMoS says that the ellipsis should be three periods seperated by
spaces, but all of the ellipses in this book are the ellipsis character.)22
Unlike the warehouses => Unlike at the warehouses25 sheer breathtaking =>
sheer, breathtaking27 as the close => as they close28 stuck on the head =>
? struck on the head29 to collect to => to connect to30 yes …
Radyard => yes . . . Radyard (pamos)30 men … good drinkers … fine => men . .
. good drinkers . . . fine (pamos)30 Only … well => Only . . . well
(pamos)34 door of th
e bridge => floor of the bridge (cf.332,251)34 vices => voices (cf.332,251)37
crew of The Triasus are => ? crew of The Triasus is37 Sesketera's crew begin
=> ? Sesketera's crew begins40 Yet after a few moments later you => ? (It
sounds bad to me with both 'after' and 'later')43 you Kai tunic => your Kai
tunic45 If you wish to keep this key...you take the Iron Key from your
pocket => (Here it seems you have a choice of whether to keep the key; then it
assumes that you do keep it.)45 record it on your Action Chart as a Backpack
Item...you take the Iron Key from your pocket => (a Backpack Item you keep in
your pocket?)52 city guard see you, pursue you, and quickly overpower you
by their => ? city guard sees you, pursues you, and quickly overpowers you by
its52 the city watch round up the Suhnese and guard => ? the city watch
rounds up the Suhnese and guards53 you see can see => you can see53
Soothsayers Shop => Soothsayer's Shop54 Backpack and weapons => ? Backpack and
Weapons5
8 come to village => ? come to a village61 Each of these potions
cost => Each of these potions costs61 one or more of them => ? one or both
of them ('more' implies that there are more than one of each potion.)69 he
is asks => he asks75 hall below, you are => hall below; you are78 whispers
Oriah, ‘they are => whispers Oriah. ‘They are78 New Order (should this
be italicised?)81 If you possess an Iron Key => (You cannot arrive at
this section with the Iron Key. While it's probably not an error correctable
by us, I'd like to see it go in the rejected errata record at least for the
convenience of Joe or the lads at Mongoose for when they bring out the new
edition.)85 first volley of arrows come => first volley of arrows comes86
(needs same footnote as ref.269)95 Coppersmith's Hall => ? Coppersmiths'
Hall95 hall => ? Hall99 to erase 7 Gold Crowns from your current
total. => ? to subtract 7 Gold Crowns from your current total.106 section
=> Section (pamos)108 but tha
n a => but then a109 dawn-to-dusk curfew => ? dusk-to-dawn curfew109 dismal
mood of its natives and the large number of street beggars leaves => dismal
mood of its natives and the large number of street beggars leave114 Nobles …
and => Nobles . . . and116 per potion => (i assume there is no limit on
amount)122 it terrible attack => its terrible attack128 crew of The Triasus
are => ? crew of The Triasus is128 Sesketera's crew begin => ? Sesketera's
crew begins132 them open and escape => them open, and escape136 pending
… er, => pending . . . er,138 a room and meal here costs => a room and meal
here cost139 crew cast off and catch => ? crew casts off and catches139
as is sails => as it sails140 group of native bandits emerge => group of
native bandits emerges141 projecting you healing => projecting your
healing148 The city guard pursue you and quickly overpower you by their => ?
The city guard pursues you and quickly overpowers you by its148 the city
watch round
up the Suhnese and guard => ? the city watch rounds up the Suhnese and
guards150 militia arrive => ? militia arrives151 barge => ? barge into
(according to dictionary.com, this meaning is only intransitive.)152
weapons, make the appropriate adjustment to your Action Chart. (The maximum
number of normal weapons => ? Weapons156 items that he has on display are
the following => (how much do they cost?)156 purchase of sell => purchase or
sell164 the door you assure => the door, you assure170 New Order (should this
be italicised?)178 crew weigh anchor and prepare => ? crew weighs anchor
and prepares178 as is sails => as it sails184 the crew begin => the crew
begins187 If you possess an Iron Key => (You cannot arrive at this section
with the Iron Key.)200 Coppersmith's Hall => ? Coppersmiths' Hall201 Mmm …
he's => Mmm . . . he's201 know … they => know . . . they202 crew of The
Triasus are => ? crew of The Triasus is202 Sesketera's crew begin => ?
Sesketera's crew be
gins216 blanket => ? Blanket216 He says that => ? Melchar says that
(improves clarity)219 not attack; it continues => ? not attack you; it
continues221 patrol confiscates your weapons (including your Kai Weapon) and
march => (here it's both singular and plural.)221 black-stoned => ?
black, stone222 Jailers => Gaolers228 The city watch round you up and
guard => ? The city watch rounds you up and guards231 stuck on the legs => ?
struck on the legs232 men … good drinkers … fine => men . . . good drinkers
. . . fine232 Only … well => Only . . . well234 If you possess an
Iron Key => (You cannot arrive at this section with the Iron Key.)236 swirls
above your head and then grow => swirls above your head and then grows241
3 ENDURANCE point => 3 ENDURANCE points245 Oriah's body => ? Oriah's
person245 section 215 => Section 215253 No … no => No . . . no254
it … and => it . . . and257 militia gain => ? militia gains258 city
watch training closer => ?
city watch drawing closer259 6 Nobles (i assume gold crowns are
accepted.)259 indescribable … but => indescribable . . . but259
Grey Star-the => ? Grey Star, the260 crew appear => ? crew appears264
you mind, she's sure => ? you mind; she's sure265 on to => onto272
He says that => ? Melchar says that (improves clarity)280 in Ghol-Tabras
market => ? in the Ghol-Tabras market282 Coppersmiths Hall => Coppersmiths'
Hall283 north quarter => ? North Quarter (cf.201,279,33)287 It is
short voyage => ? It is a short voyage (cf.188)290 of the head of every
ruler => ? of the heads of every ruler291 grimy, tattered grey => grimy,
tattered, grey295 It is short voyage => ? It is a short voyage
(cf.188)299 trust of distrust => trust or distrust299 Come, we =>
? Come. We301 weapon => ? Weapon302 If you possess an Iron Key => (You
cannot arrive at this section with the Iron Key.)304 Backpack and weapons =>
Backpack and Weapons308 Moonstone, your weapons => Moonstone, your Weapons308
3
Fish Hooks (is this really a backpack item?)309 at the foot of the
spiral stairs => at the foot of a set of spiral stairs (You have not yet seen
the stairs on this path)315 It look's like => It looks like319 others,
‘This => others. ‘This325` indescribable … but => indescribable . . .
but325 Grey Star-the => ? Grey Star, the326 across market square =>
across the market square (cf. 159)330 sound of booted feet and the blare of a
brass horn echoes => sound of booted feet and the blare of a brass horn echo330
city watch raise the alarm and give => ? city watch raises the alarm and
gives331 He says that => ? Melchar says that (improves clarity)333
Radyard take => Radyard takes333 from royal household => ? from the
royal household333 it … in => it . . . in335 you blend perfectly => ?
you blend in perfectly336 -Levitation- => (italicise?)337 a trio of
gaolers suddenly appear => ? a trio of gaolers suddenly appears345 The city
watch surround you and gu
ard => ? The city watch surrounds you and guards348 stuck on the back => ?
struck on the back(errata) Replaced ‘LW’ with ‘LW indicates loss of
ENDURANCE points to Lone Wolf’ with ‘GM indicates loss of ENDURANCE points to
yourself’.> Replaced ‘Combat Results Tables’ with ‘Combat Results Table’. => ?
Replaced ‘LW’ with 'GM". Replaced ‘LW indicates loss of ENDURANCE points to
Lone Wolf’ with ‘GM indicates loss of ENDURANCE points to yourself’.> Replaced
‘Combat Results Tables’ with ‘Combat Results Table’. (ill 2) masthead … a =>
masthead . . . a(ill 17) The group are listening => The group is
listening(ill 18) Bad … dragon … is => Bad . . . dragon . . . is
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