[projectaon] Re: Wolf's Bane errors
- From: Jonathan Blake <jonathan.blake@xxxxxxxxxxxxxx>
- To: projectaon@xxxxxxxxxxxxx
- Date: Sat, 31 Jan 2009 13:40:08 -0800
I shouldn't have been so hasty until I got to the bottom of my inbox. :)
On Sat, Jan 31, 2009 at 5:39 AM, Simon Osborne <outspaced@xxxxxxxxxxxx> wrote:
> Anders Österberg wrote:
>> Section 112: "Your return to Sommerlund will not be alone, Wolf's Bane".
>> This strikes me as an odd thing to say. Shouldn't it read: "You will not
>> return to Sommerlund alone, Wolf's Bane"?
>
> Hmm. It's not exactly incorrect, but it is a cumbersome turn of phrase. I'll
> escalate this to Jon for a final decision.
I agree that this is awkward. I like your suggestion, Anders.
>> * Section 331: "Nothing could have prepared you for the sight that now
>> meets your gaze - it is the foulest you have ever seen." There should be a
>> "thing" there, as in "it is the foulest thing you have ever seen". The text
>> below the illustration is correct.
>
> Hmm. Again, the text isn't incorrect. In the sentence, "it" is referring to
> "the sight" and it is not wrong to say "[the sight] is the worst you've ever
> seen". That said, it is another cumbersome phrase. Escalated to Jon.
This omission is OK. No need to change.
>> * Section 350: "If you are to prevent the Dark God from launching his
>> armies of night into Magnamund..." I'm fairly certain Armies of Night should
>> be capitalized.
>
> I can see where you're coming from with this one too. Arguments could
> probably be made for either capitalising it or leaving it alone, so I'll
> escalate this to Jon as well. (Sorry, Jon!)
I could see this, but I don't think this was intended as the name of a
group but rather a evocative description of Naar's minions.
Thank you, Anders.
--
Jon
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