[projectaon] Re: Finishing touches on Deathlord

  • From: Simon Osborne <outspaced@xxxxxxxxxxxx>
  • To: projectaon@xxxxxxxxxxxxx
  • Date: Tue, 06 Jun 2006 22:32:55 +0100

Jonathan Blake wrote: 

141: crafted by Old Kingdom armourers -> crafted by ancient Ixian armourers
152: in the time of the Old Kingdoms -> in the time before the coming
of the Deathlord
162: propelled by Old Kingdom magic -> propelled by ancient Ixian
magic [jb: particularly because this section later says that it is "an
arcane art far older and more benign than the Deathlord's vile
necromancy"]
165: where once a proud and mighty race of the Old Kingdom reigned
supreme -> where once a proud and mighty race reigned supreme before
the coming of the Deathlord
343: in the time of the Old Kingdoms -> in the time before the coming
of the Deathlord

I agree with David. If we're going to fix things, we should do this, /and/ the FINAL final edit he mentioned in his post! ;-D

Gah! We've about rewritten this book, haven't we??

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Simon Osborne

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