[projectaon] Re: New Order Grand Weaponmastery text
- From: Ingo Kloecker <projectaon@xxxxxxxxxxxxxxxx>
- To: projectaon@xxxxxxxxxxxxx
- Date: Sun, 31 Aug 2008 23:46:42 +0200
On Friday 29 August 2008, Jonathan Blake wrote:
> On Fri, Aug 29, 2008 at 6:05 AM, Simon Osborne
<outspaced@xxxxxxxxxxxx> wrote:
> > Ingo Kloecker wrote:
> >> "For every adventure that you complete successfully in the New
> >> Order series [possessing/knowing/mastering/having the discipline
> >> of Grand Weaponmastery], you will gain proficiency with one
> >> additional weapon."
> >
> > That's much better than my proposal, sure. Cheers! Escalated to
> > Jon.
>
> "For every adventure that you complete successfully in the New Order
> series while possessing the discipline of Grand Weaponmastery, you
> will gain proficiency with one additional weapon"
>
> Notice the "while" which I think puts the finishing touch on your
> suggested wording, Ingo.
Great. With the "while" it does sound better indeed, even for my
non-native ears. :-)
Regards,
Ingo
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