[projectaon] Re: Comment Period for 24rw
- From: Jonathan Blake <blake.jon@xxxxxxxxx>
- To: projectaon@xxxxxxxxxxxxx
- Date: Tue, 9 Nov 2010 17:12:15 -0800
tssf: a link to the map might be helpful here
148: the numbered list should be marked-up with <ol>...</ol>
174: maybe change the comma at the end of the third choice to an ellipsis
226: (two changes) horde and, as of Vandyan himself -> horde, and as
for Vandyan himself
299: Footnote could state definitely that this is a reptilian opponent
(cf. Section 143) instead of "apparently".
330: hang dawn -> hang down
footnotes for Sections 24, 52, 73, 84, 92, 126, 160, 217, 264, 277,
282, 304, should read "their unique properties". (cf. 75)
That's all I found.
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Jon
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