[projectaon] Re: Contact Letter Draft
- From: VHFreak@xxxxxxx
- To: projectaon@xxxxxxxxxxxxx
- Date: Sun, 9 Jan 2005 00:38:03 EST
In a message dated 1/8/2005 9:42:18 AM Central Standard Time,
blake.jon@xxxxxxxxx writes:
> I am writing on behalf of Project Aon, a group of admirers of the
> Magnamund Companion that you helped to illustrate, and the world of
> Magnamund in general. If you are not the same [name] that worked on
> this book, we would still appreciate a reply so that we can make note
> of it and refrain from disturbing you again in the future.
The first paragraph of this didn't read well to me. Perhaps the first
sentence should read something like this: "I am writing on behalf of Project
Aon, a
group of admirers of the [fictional?] world of Magnamund, including the
Magnamund Companion that you helped illustrate."
I also think the "if you are not the same" sentence may read better later on
in the letter. In the first paragraph, I don't think it's very clear what
this is all about just yet, and that sentence seems to me a little out of place.
I realize I very rarely pipe in around here, but as an unofficial member of
the Grammar Police, I felt I need to throw in my two cents....
Rob Hataway
Ridgeland, MS
Other related posts: