[projectaon] Re: Footnotes Galore
- From: Jonathan Blake <jonathan@xxxxxxxxxxxxx>
- To: Project Aon List <projectaon@xxxxxxxxxxxxx>
- Date: Mon, 4 Aug 2014 13:50:48 -0700
For The Caverns of Kalte:
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16: Section rewritten. Footnote incorporated into the section text. [JR]
"two separate items have been crushed and must be discarded here." ->
Add: "You may choose which Backpack Items to delete. If you only have
one item in your Backpack, then this single item has been destroyed."
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Agreed.
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32: Section rewritten. Footnote incorporated into the section text. [JR]
Add: "If you have already fought or killed any of these Kalkoth in a
previous section, record the damage you have already inflicted upon
them before commencing this battle. If the earlier combat listed only
two Kalkoth because you crept up on them and managed to kill one,
ignore Kalkoth 3 in this fight."
That said, it's a bit long-winded. :-\
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Agreed. Regrettably, I can't think of a better way to state this.
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61: Section rewritten, adding "Your adventure is over." to the last
paragraph. [JR]
[SO: Hmm. Maybe. I actually like our footnote here more than the
single sentence, but we could possibly go this route.]
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Yeah, I like the footnote better. I suggest that we reword it though:
Current: This peculiar ending is the only time in the entire Lone Wolf
series where you can fail your mission without actually dying. Despite
the fact that it may take quite a bit of effort to get here, it does
not count as a completion for this adventure. You still may not use
your character in future adventures.
Suggestion: This peculiar ending is the only time in the Lone Wolf
series where you can fail your mission without dying. Despite your
survival, you have not completed this adventure and may not continue
on to future adventures.
--
Jon
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