[projectaon] Re: Freeway Warrior - Proposed XML changes and pending concerns.

  • From: Simon Osborne <outspaced@xxxxxxxxxxxx>
  • To: projectaon@xxxxxxxxxxxxx
  • Date: Sat, 17 Dec 2005 18:01:02 +0000

Iain Smith wrote: 

I've not been able to do much work on the books recently (now I know how 
everyone else
feels).  I have managed to cobble together a list of things I'd like to press 
on with and
get updated.  I've also collated a list of my other concerns which were raised 
as I
worked on the books.  I should really go back and check the mailing list for 
peoples
suggestions, etc made in response to these items when I first posted them.

There are a few comments made previously that might be relevant, but much of what has been said related to issues that were decided upon for your second pass through the XML.

Changes I'd Like To Make:

Change item lists using uppercase to initial capitals (fw1-sect20, fw1-sect85, fw1-sect98), this is the style used everywhere else in the series.

The change you propose will also bring the equipment lists into line with Project Aon's Lone Wolf books, so this seems eminently reasonable.

Change "how many shots" text for consistency, the following are affected:
The "burst" ones which also refer to rounds certainly need changing, however 
I'd like to change them all to use (minimum: one; maximum: whatever) for consistency.

Again, this sounds reasonable. Putting "rules-text" into consistent phraseology is always a good idea, IMHO.

"H.E. Grenade" vs "HE Grenade":

Another consistency change. While I think "H.E. Grenade" looks better, it's a much less substantial change to switch the three occurences of "H.E." Grenade to "HE Grenade"

However, Project Aon has changed all occurrences of eg and ie to e.g. and i.e., so while it may be more work, I personally would opt for changing the HE to H.E. But that's not an official decision, by any means!

"the Day" vs "The Day"
Another consistency change. If we ignore the occurences of "The Day" in "Dateline to 
Disaster" in all four books (since its a title in InitCaps), then the usage breaks down as 
follows:
'the Day' FW1 (x6), FW2 (x11), FW4 (x6)
'The Day' FW3 (x9), FW4 (x1)
My opinion is that it was a monumental event so should really be "The Day" 
throughout.


I'd agree that 'The Day' lends it the requisite gravitas.

"Gulley" vs "Gully"
There are 13 occurences of "Gulley" in FW1 which need changing to "Gully".


Consistent with the Style Manual, so this is fine.

"Syphon" vs "Siphon"
The following occurences of "Syphon" need changing to "Siphon"
FW1: Section 1
FW2: TSSF, Sections 168, 183, 226, 239
FW3: TSSF, Sections 66, 92, 129, 195, 269
FW4: TSSF, Sections 55, 76, 174, 211


Sounds like a good idea.

FW3, section 39: "large enough to of the truck". Major errata, not an easy fix.

I asked about this on the forum recently, and the only response I had was from someone with a US edition of the book that had the same problem! :-\

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Simon Osborne


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