[projectaon] Residue of the 21votm errata
- From: Jonathan Blake <blake.jon@xxxxxxxxx>
- To: Project Aon List <projectaon@xxxxxxxxxxxxx>
- Date: Fri, 17 Apr 2009 13:46:07 -0700
(er) Equipment: (Special Items) -> (Special Item) [cf. (Backpack Item)]
Also cf. (Weapons). :) This goes all the way back to Flight from the
Dark. I'm not especially motivated to make this change.
(er) Equipment: (Weapons) -> (Weapon) [cf. (Backpack Item)]
Also cf. (Special Items). ;) What happened to majority rule?
(er) 35: the Trarta shoal have -> the Trarta shoal has [LM]
OK as-is.
(er) 47, 123: you see your own Arrow strike -> (in order to arrive at
this section, you must opt to not use a bow) [LM]
47: As the remnants of his missile fall to the ground you see your own
Arrow strike your enemy in the chest and knock him down. -> The
remnants of his missile fall to the ground.
123: As the splintered wood of the missile falls to the ground, you
see your own Arrow strike your would-be killer in the chest and knock
him down. -> The splintered wood of the missile falls to the ground.
The story _almost_ flows okay without the detail of why the archer
isn't shooting at you anymore. Perhaps we should also footnote it:
~~~~~
The original mentioned that you "see your own Arrow strike [the
archer] in the chest and knock him down." To reach this Section, you
must not have fired a Bow. Having removed this text, it is left to you
to explain why the Grand Master escapes while the archer still lives.
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(er) 62: [Remove all - symbols from list]
OK as-is.
And add dashes to list in 151. :)
(er) 159: few miles to the north -> few miles to the south (cf. ref. 179)
[LM]
agreed
(er) 159: Great Masourn mountain range -> ? Great Masourn Mountain Range
[LM]
agreed
(er) 163, 196, 256: orphaned section [LM]
[LM: Maybe link 115 -> 163 instead of 341.]
OK, but we need to change the 8 EP loss to 4.
[LM: Make the RNT pick in 337 link to 196 and 256 as well (change the
2 options to 4)]
Good suggestion:
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(er) 337: 4 or lower -> 2 or lower
(er) 337: 5 or higher -> 8 or higher
(er) 337: add "If it is 3-4, turn to 196." and "If it is 5-7, turn to 256."
~~~~~
We may also want to make the text in 256 match that in 111 since it
seems that Joe (or someone else) made slight changes to the phrasing
that I imagine were part of the editing process.
--
Jon
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