[projectaon] Re: Residue of the 21votm errata
- From: Simon Osborne <outspaced@xxxxxxxxxxxx>
- To: projectaon@xxxxxxxxxxxxx
- Date: Mon, 20 Apr 2009 14:36:33 +0100
Hi
Mostly fixed--please see the comments below for the few niggles marked with a double-asterisk** that
I haven't changed (yet?).
<http://www.projectaon.org/en/Errata/VoyageOfTheMoonstone>
See the Errata Page for info on what is currently outstanding. I'll have to get to my playthrough
tomorrow--I'm exhausted just going through this list! >_<
On 17/04/2009 21:46, Jonathan Blake wrote:
(er) Equipment: (Special Items) -> (Special Item) [cf. (Backpack Item)]
(er) Equipment: (Weapons) -> (Weapon) [cf. (Backpack Item)]
(er) 35: the Trarta shoal have -> the Trarta shoal has [LM]
OK as-is.
Rejected (forever! No revisits!!)
(er) 47, 123: you see your own Arrow strike -> (in order to arrive at
this section, you must opt to not use a bow) [LM]
Implemented both the changes to the text and the footnotes.
(er) 62: [Remove all - symbols from list]
OK as-is.
And add dashes to list in 151. :)
*sigh* Rejected 62 and "Fixed" 151. ;-)
(er) 159: few miles to the north -> few miles to the south (cf. ref.
179) [LM]
Fixed.
(er) 159: Great Masourn mountain range -> ? Great Masourn Mountain Range
[LM]
**I just want definite confirmation on this one, and how it affects Book 1.
(er) 163, 196, 256: orphaned section [LM]
[LM: Maybe link 115 -> 163 instead of 341.]
OK, but we need to change the 8 EP loss to 4.
**Fixed all these except making the EP loss change. I don't think it needs
changing.
Ingo wrote:
http://www.projectaon.org/test/en/xhtml/lw/21votm/kainame.htm
- It would be great if the table(s) was/were centered horizontally.
- There should be a bit space between the table(s) and the navigation
bar.
**Er . . . how do I do that? I'm really not an xml expert! If we can do it,
let's do it. ;-)
http://www.projectaon.org/test/en/xhtml/lw/21votm/maplarge.htm
- The offset/misalignment of the two maps looks weird. It seems the
actual maps (without the white border) are supposed to be aligned, but
that's not really the case since the upper map is slightly larger than
the lower map. I suggest extending the upper map a bit to the right
such that it aligns with the right border of the white border of the
lower map and correspondingly for the lower map and the left border of
the upper map.
I've edited the map in a slightly different way, but with the same results. Check
<http://www.projectaon.org/test/en/xhtml/lw/21votm/map.htm>
dedication: It might be nice to footnote who Aung San Suu Kyi is.
**Feel free to go ahead. ;-)
acknowledgments: Needs to be updated. We don't need be specific on the
proofreading because Sean Donald did the entire book.
Done. I've also credited Brian Williams' illustrations here as well.
disciplines: "If this is the first New Order adventure you have
undertaken then your present rank is that of Kai Grand Master Senior."
Is this necessary? Or does this seem to imply that you can read the
books out of order? I suggest that we remove this sentence.
Uh, that's a dumb copy/paste error. The text now reads (as per the original book): "Your present
rank of [Kai] Grand Master Senior means that..."
Also, changed "Grand Master" to "Kai Grand Master" both here and on the Levels page. This is to
bring this book into harmony with subsequent books in the series.
disciplines: "all of the New Order Grand Master Disciplines will be of
use to you at some point during your mission" -> "all of the New Order
Grand Master Disciplines may be of use to you at some point during
your mission"
Fixed in LW 1-28, GS 1-3.
disciplines: "you are skilled in the use of one of the weapons listed
in the Equipment section." Are you _really_ limited to Quarterstaff,
Bow, Dagger, Sword, or Axe?
**Since you get to pick your Kai Weapon, I would say you are limited to those
choices, yes.
disciplines: "your original four Grand Master Disciplines, your Kai
Weapon,..." The Kai Weapon hasn't been mentioned yet, so maybe a
footnote that says "Details about the Kai Weapon appear in the next
section of the game rules." Also, it might be good to add to this
sentence the idea that this is contingent on completing the first
portion of the mission successfully.
Added the footnote; Rejected the other proposal, since the paragraph begins: "If you successfully
complete the mission as set in Book 21..."
Added footnote also to Books 22-28.
equipment: "only two of which may be Weapons" Including the Quiver?
Ben Krefetz wrote:
I think the "only two of which may be Weapons" qualification is only there to
remind the reader that the Grand Master can't carry more than two regular weapons, so
the Quiver's separate.
Agreed. Rejected.
equipment: "record them on your Weapons List." And on the Special Items list?
Ben Krefetz wrote:
"Weapons List" is inaccurate to begin with, since the Quiver and Arrows are recorded in
the same miscellaneous section with Belt Pouch and Meals. Maybe change to "record them on
your Action Chart"?
**Should we change this from "Weapons List" to "Action Chart" in Books 6-28?
equipment: "then you may add the higher bonus to your COMBAT SKILL."
Footnote: "These bonuses are not cumulative."
**Isn't this explained in the example immediately below this?
equipment: It seems like we need to add some margin to the bottom of
tables in the text.
**How is this done? (Affects Books 21-28)
equipment: "If you have the Discipline of Grand Weaponmastery with
Bow, you may add 3 points to any number you pick from the Random
Number Table, when using the Bow." Wouldn't this be nice to know when
picking your Disciplines? Footnote, or move this there?
Ben wrote:
I vote for putting something to this effect directly into the description of
Grand Weaponmastery on the Disciplines page.
Moved the text from Equipment to Disciplines. Fixed in Books 21-28.
improved disciplines: "Lone Wolf New Order series" Should we italicize
all of "Lone Wolf New Order"?
**cf. /Lone Wolf/ Kai, /Lone Wolf/ Magnakai, /Lone Wolf/ Grand Master.
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Simon Osborne
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